simultaneously

kenny4528 said:

Hi, friends

Another problem is that in some countries accidents are caused because people drive their cars and talk on the phone simultaneously.

I would like to leave out ''simultaneously" to rewrite the sentence in another way:

Another problem is that in some countries accidents are caused because, while people drive their cars, they also talk on the phone at the same time.

Would you think that my sentence is acceptable?
Or you could come up with a better structure?

Thanks.

Dimcl said:

In your rewritten sentence, you'd leave out "at the same time" because you've used the word "while".

AWordLover said:

Hi All,

The use of the collocation "caused because" bothers me.

Another problem is that in some countries car accidents are caused by people people talking on the phone while driving.

AWordLover said:

Hi All,

The use of the collocation "caused because" bothers me.

Another problem is that in some countries car accidents are caused by people talking on the phone while driving.

Edit: I changed people people to people. Thank you kenny for noticing the blunder.